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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my concern over an item that I lost on my recent Excursion. It was
Nikon
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a Nikon
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 camera.
To begin
 with, 3 days ago, I went to Thailand with my friends. it was a wonderful trip but when I returned from the trip, I noticed that my camera was not in my bag.
However
, I have checked every corner of my room
as well as
 my backpack repeatedly but I did not find it.
In addition
 to
this
, It was a brand new Nikon camcorder and my father gifted the camcorder just before the tour.
Further
 to
this
, Its current market price is $1200 which is quite expensive.
Moreover
, on the return day, I was in hurry to organize my backpack.
Furthermore
, when I reached the airport, our flight got cancelled owing to bad weather,
thus
, we have to wait at the airport for 3 hours more. During the waiting period, I have seen my camera in my bag.
Subsequently
, I needed to go to the washroom and told one of your agents to take care of my belongings. I should have checked my belongings after coming from the washroom. It's worth mentioning that in my travel insurance, it has been written that I will get a 70% refund based on the lost item worth. Let me if you need any documents from my side. I look forward to hearing from you and I hope you will solve the issue at the earliest. I am awaiting your prompt response. Your Faithfully. Lisa Akter
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