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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a discussion that universities should balance the number of both male and female
students
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 to be equal in every subject. In my view, I do not agree with
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 statement because it is not fair to those who cannot be accepted but meets the requirements, and, obviously, man and woman can achieve different tasks with different abilities.
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some people think that an equal number of enrollments is a fair scheme.
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, it actually disturbs some chances of getting a sit of study at universities, missing a lot of potentially great
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. it can be imagined that colleges would stop accepting extra
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 if there had been already a full of the corresponding gender in a class, even if the
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 fairly meets the requirements.
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 the
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 may lose his or her opportunity to study at university. It can be counter-productive.
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it is common consciousness that males and females are comparatively various in many aspects, so it is not realistic to set
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 rule in enrollment.
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, men generally have greater power in calculation than women,
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, some
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such
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 as Science and Mathematics are more suitable for male
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.
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, women having immense ingenuity and creativity are able to study some aesthetic
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 as Art.
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, every single subject has different standards. Every people getting unique abilities can choose their favourite
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 freely and could not be confined by the "balance" of enrollment numbers. In summary,
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 scheme is detrimental to the right of choosing
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 freely and make some
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 lose their chances. I think that universities can give equal opportunity to every
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 depending on their academic results, but not on their gender.
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