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Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

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reason they are always used technically like helicopters and private jets and the
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not a huge problem because society has low-cost aeroplanes and they are very popular in Europe.
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, you understand, that you want to fly away from Austria to Italy and check out a
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 of nice cities like Rome, Venice, Napoli etc. Thanks for the low
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 for the ticket we have a chance to do it.
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, I believe that the plane, which has a chip ticket for them is very important
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 since propels can visit new
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 and not spend a huge sum to trip.
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, because planes burn a
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 of fuel and
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 is a reason why seats cost a
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 that part of nationality does not have any opportunities to visit new
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, I understand, that the costs are huge case they burn a giant volume of fuel per hour. In the end, to be honest, I agree with
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 of the ticket does not be increasing, because it will become a barrier to travellers and a
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 can not take money from resorts.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental pollution
  • deterrent
  • aviation technologies
  • disproportionately affect
  • global carbon tax
  • alternative solutions
  • tourism-dependent economies
  • cleaner fuels
  • efficient flight paths
  • carbon emissions
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