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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal informatoin, such as their hobbies and interests, and wheteher they are married or single. some people say tha this information may be relevent and useful. other disagree.

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Well, Speaking on employers asking people applying for jobs for personal
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 as their hobbies and interest and
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 whether they are married or single. From my point of view, I think it's vital for some employers to know certain
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 for a high position in the
company
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, Applying for the manager of the
company
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. I think employers need to know certain
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 as married status, interests and hobbies to make the
company
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 move forward. And
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, People think it is irrelevant for giving out their personal
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 and making it more professional based on what they are applying for. To my knowledge, I think it's part of the requirements when seeking a certain position in a
company
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, Still talking about a managing director post. I believe knowing the interest, hobbies and marital status should be considered because given the position of a managing director you need to handle most of the activities if not all the activities going on in the
company
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. The capabilities to control the
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 which is the interest, sexually related activities
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 not mixing pleasures with business, and other abilities to spice up in sense of bringing other ideas to the
company
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, in search for other job opportunities people find it regardless to be asked about their personal data and always what to keep it confidential and professional based on the type of job they apply for. They
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 thick from the book. looking into accounting positions, they
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 want to be asked
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 to be book and mix their personal lives with business because they feel it has nothing to do with it. In conclusion, I think employees should be asked some personal questions to know the ability, quality, how stable the individual is and capability of whom they are employing in the organization. because the whole point of a
company
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 is to make it forward and great. so, yes it should be part of the requirement of a
company
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