some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . Discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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Advertising has become an
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world. Where proponents of the arguments
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favour,
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the
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opponents
are completely against the
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relevance
of the promoting.In my opinion, advertising is
extremly
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extremely
successful at persuading us to buy things and it has more positive impacts than negative around the globe. To commence with, there are a number of arguments in favour of my belief. The most prominent
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is that
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companies
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better. General people can know about
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valuable product which they have searched for more days.
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, it creates
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's creative level which
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promotes
promote
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top to bottom
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discription
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description
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According to
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the research conducted by western
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most
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people nowadays buy
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a product
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product
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products
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after seeing the
advertisment
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advertisement
.
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, the increasing sold of Tesla
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because of
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advertising.
On the other hand
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, critics may point out that,
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of the most
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significant
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marketing is that it may the reason
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consumer's
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boredom.
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it feels annoying.
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,
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survey conducted in
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states, advertising creates
affcted
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affected
our brains so that people set in their mind
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product will buy next time.
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, advertising is most popular in
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world.
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, even
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are a lot of demerits
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marketing, the advantage outweigh the disadvantages and marketing has become a
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crucial
part of our life.
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, efficient use of
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promoting
should be promoted,
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however
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it's
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its
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mis use
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misuse
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should be condemned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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