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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage of contributions for two sectors in the United Kingdom between 1992 and 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that the GDP for
service
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the service
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industry
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 increased steadily during all
period
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periods
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.
However
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, the percentage of the IT
industry
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 shew
some
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apply
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fluctuation
through
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over
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the
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apply
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time.
Contribution
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The contribution
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 of the IT
industry
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 raised relatively by around 2
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percent
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per cent
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 from 1992 to 1994.
Then
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 in
1996
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,1996
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 it remained stable at less than 8%. After that contribution raised sharply by 4
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percent
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per cent
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 and was at 12%. By
the
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apply
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2000 it reached a peak at approximately 15
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percent
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per cent
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. The difference between percentages of the service and IT
industry
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 dropped slightly from 1992 to 1996 and were 4%, 6% and 7%, respectively.
However
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, in 1996 it was a little bit less than 8
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percent
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per cent
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, but the second category at the same time was higher by 4%.
In addition
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, in the
last
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 year
service
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the service
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 sphere rose to a little more than 8 per cent.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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