In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Getting old is part of
life
. Many old people live in old
age
homes rather than with children. They are taken care
by
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nurses
instead
of their own
offsprings
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offspring
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. On top of that, the expenses are
also
borne by
government
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the government
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in-place
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in place
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of the family. In my perspective, senior citizens who have extended families should
spen
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spend
spent
their
last
days in
own
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their own
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houses. The
government
should pay only for those elderly residents who do not have anyone to be looked
after
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themafter
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. In the modern days of society,
the
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people are very ambitious and have lost the
connect
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to their roots i.e.
parents
.
Additionally
, they are so engrossed in their lives that youth do not want to take responsibility
of
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for
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those who have raised them to become what they are.
Instead
of being concerned about
increasing
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the increasing
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age
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the age
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of the elders in
family
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the family
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, they consider them as a burden on themselves. Undoubtedly, it becomes hard to manage day-to-day tasks independently
later
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in later
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stages of
life
, father and mother are helpless
but
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to seek
help
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the help
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of
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the younger ones, without any support from them they become dependent on nurses.
Furthermore
, during
this
tough time in
life
,
parents
or grandparents not only need someone to take care
but
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also
expect love which only a home can provide.
However
, today's generation does not believe in
joint
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family and
are
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is
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more in support of
nuclear
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the nuclear
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family.
As a result
, the burden is sent to old
age
homes. Many of them do not even pay and
parents
are left as a
responsibilty
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responsibility
of
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for
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government
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the government
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. In
such
cases, the bills should be sent to respective children since they must meet
the
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their
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basic need at least. If in case there are no heirs of someone, the local bodies must help as every individual has paid taxes to lawmakers with
a
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the
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hope to secure
these kind
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this kind
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of contingencies. Recently, I visited an old
age
home where I met
parents
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the parents
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of my old friend who is doing well in his
life
but the bills are met by the authorities. It is
misuse
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a misuse
the misuse
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of the policies. I met some other residents
also
who does not have any relative left, in that case,
government
plays an angelic role by helping them.
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  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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