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Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

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To tell the truth, shopping is a
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 for many people. Today we live in a technology world, I mean that the internet around for life.no doubt shopping is important for all social categories (man-women-child). I have many habits one of these habits is online shopping,
furthermore
, online shopping is very convenient.
In addition
, in our present time the rent of a
store
 inside a mall has a high cost and is very small and limits production,
whereas
, in the online
store
, you can take unlimited figures of production. And, online shopping could save me time in my hometown because Riyadh has a problem which its crowded road. From my perspective, I believe online shopping is a very good idea and another service provide by the
store
,
such
 as delivery items or if you went receipt from the brunch is very amazing and more comfortable.
In contrast
, some people like to go to the mall and believe that seeing the product, in fact, is better than getting online without checking the quality and the colour, I agree with
this
.
Nevertheless
, I search for a fast process.
Overall
, you must focus if going to order from an online
store
 because not all suppliers are honest, and sometimes you get deceived by a virtual website or application. In conclusion, in my opinion, many people searched the fast way because we live in a fast present time around the internet and the development of everything,
however
, online shopping has overtaken
store
 shopping.
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