Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Some individuals are used to buying their
children
whatever they ask and permitting them to do whatever they want. In my personal point of view, it is a bad habit. In
this
essay, I will support my ideas with strong arguments and write about
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consequences. Today a huge number of
parents
are used to performing any wishes of their
children
. Definitely, it is unprofitable for
children
. Doing whatever they ask can damage the future character of
children
and time by
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they will become dependent on someone, mostly on
parents
.
For instance
, one of my friends whose
parents
did whatever he asked cannot solve his simple problems by himself.
Moreover
, allowing
children
to do whatever they want can
also
lead to serious problems. Being selfish and egoistic can be
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it.
For instance
, in the future when
children
will go to school it would be hard to control them. They will start hysterics and approve that they are right even if they
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.
However
, it is just a little. There are some other disadvantages too. The first and most obvious is that these
children
will become self-interested adults who do not care a lot about the feelings and needs of others. These
children
will have problems with working in a team with other colleges.
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negative effect is that these
children
will be more impulsive. Because of
parents
who did whatever they asked without any doubt,
children
will become less patient and have often anger.
To conclude
, it is important to state that
children
who are allowed to do anything and have nothing
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likely to be selfish. In the future, it will be hard for them to be part of a team.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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