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The ple chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The ple chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about the declining quality of productivity of agricultural
land
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 the table illustrates the points why it occurred with efficiency in three different places in the world during the 1990s. Generally, the main causing problem is over-grazing,being one-third part of all
land
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 degradation, which is caused mainly by the Oceania region. As a total result,
Europe
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's population was damaged bigger than others. North America is a region where the total
land
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 degraded with the most negligible percentage of all causes amid the other countries.
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,
Europe
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 has the most damageable areas
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 as deforestation and over-cultivation with 10% and 5.5%,respectively.
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, in total
Europe
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 has a leading role among the others with 23%, having more damage if we calculate together other countries.
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, Oceania is second the biggest region which
land
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 degradation is 13%.
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, Oceania is the leader among
Europe
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 and North America in the over-grazing area with 11% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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