International sporting events like the Olympics and football World Cup place a huge financial burdens on host nations that cannot be justified. To what extent do you garee or disagree with this opinion?

There
some
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important reasons to disagree with the idea that providing competitions like
Olympic
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the Olympic
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games or
football
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the football
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World
Cup is
waste
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a waste
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of money for
host
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the host
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government. Personally, I
am completely disagree
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with
this
view. For
variety
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of reasons, it is wrong to count
that
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international sporting
events
like the Olympic games
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is burdens
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for the financial economy
for
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the
country
where that event
is provides
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is provided
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.
Firstly
, it
because
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of
money
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the money
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, which tourists bring here to live, which they spend
for
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the
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local entertainment.
Secondly
, actually, they come here not only for watching that competition
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also
for
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see
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new
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culture,
due to
its tradition in
this
country
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more popular in the
world
.
For example
, as shown
the
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football
World
Cup in Qatar,
local
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nation has a strong principle about
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religion, and because of
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they demonstrate
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,
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when someone
don’t
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respect their faith.
Thirdly
, after the really huge
events
, as I mentioned before,
country
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a country
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which provided them become more
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and respectful in the worldwide area. In my opinion, governments should be more active, to create these
events
, if they really want to improve their economy and even
politically
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conditions.
For instance
, when Qatar provided the
World
Cup approximately one and
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million visitors,
who
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had come there for watching
those
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football games and simultaneously
to
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acquaint
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the local culture. Those are good purposes for
make
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grandiose
events
in your
country
. In conclusion, I support the idea that providing international sporting
events
is
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excellent step for each government.
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