We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer–based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

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Topic Vocabulary:

Artificial Intelligence (AI)
Machine Learning
Automated
Internet of Things (IoT)
Telecommuting
Digital Technology
Virtual Workplaces
Computer-assisted
Healthcare Industry
Reliance
Privacy
Human Interaction
Job Displacement
Automation
Digital Divide
Cybersecurity
Internet Safety
Digital Crime
Ethical Considerations
Environmental Impacts
E-waste
Carbon Footprint

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer–based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn team work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, people now wear western-style dresses such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Some high schools require all students to wear uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school politics de you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.