We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer–based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

It is true to say that in
modern
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pace of ,life
computers
have a significant role in the life of
people
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therefore
some
people
believe that we are mostly relying on computer-dependent technology.
according to
my
although
the application of
computers
increases more and more with the passage of time we find another option
also
for doing a different type of tasks. To commence with,
computers
have a major role in the technical era because of the work served by the
computers
such
as with the use of computer we can not only do our work more quickly but
also
more precisely.
besides
that these days
computers
also
provide a platform to the enormous student in to study at their home.
for example
now learners can grab different types of courses at home with the
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of e-learning.
furthermore
with the use of computer we can do different types of tasks in a single device
such
as calculation, set reminders,gather information and
also
use as
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of entertainment by watching movies or listening song. Despite the fact that
computers
have huge benefits but limits on the usage of
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were equally important since at present time everyone wants to complete their job with a single click which leads to generating
people
who do not want to some extra effort to do something.
in addition
due to
laziness towards their work
people
do not want to do
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. In conclusion, without
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computers computers
computer computers
computers-computers
have a huge role to make the world more advanced in future but using them for every single task to make it more convenient has detrimental effects on life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
  • E-waste
  • Carbon Footprint
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