The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information show below
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activities
of Use synonyms
children
in Use synonyms
ausralia
ages 5-14 and the respective Correct your spelling
Australia
persentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
children
spending Use synonyms
time
on those Use synonyms
activities
.
If one Use synonyms
look
at the middle of the chart he might notice straight away that, 100% of Change the verb form
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children
spend Use synonyms
time
watching TV or consuming other Use synonyms
video based
media. Add a hyphen
video-based
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fact that almost every western household has a TV, computer or both.
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the
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activites
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activities
such
as skateboarding or arts and craft both of those Linking Words
activities
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at
around 50% of the Change preposition
in
children
Use synonyms
boys
and Use synonyms
girls
alike.
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fact that more Correct your spelling
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girls
do crafts and arts than Use synonyms
boys
, Use synonyms
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boys
tend to do physical Use synonyms
activities
like skateboarding and bike riding.
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computer gaming bars, we can Correct article usage
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differene
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difference
boys
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girls
. more Use synonyms
persentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
boys
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time
on their XBOX or other gaming devices than Use synonyms
girls
do.
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to conclude
TV is still the main Linking Words
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leisure-time
time
activity, which Use synonyms
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is perefered
perefered
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preferred
performed
children
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a large
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