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The cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what action can be taken to solve this problem.

#cities #towns #world #volume #traffic #action
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In many
cities
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 and towns around the world,
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 the rising population, the high volume of
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 is
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 increasing and being a big problem.
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, there are some steps that government should take to solve
this
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 problem. There are several causes of
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 situation. The two main causes are low prices of oil and bad conditions of public transportation.
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,
people
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 choose to drive their own vehicles than
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travel by public transport as the oil price is cheap. Another argument for why
people
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 choose to drive their own car is that conditions in public transport are miserable and that’s why there is a high volume of
traffic
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 in
cities
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.
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, another problem can be migration.
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,
people
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 who live in villages, have to come to towns or
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 to find a job or even for their children to study.
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, they will come to
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 in their own car. Various possible courses of action could be taken in order to reduce the volume of
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 in countries all over the world. The state should rise the price of oils.
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, if oils become more expensive, society will avoid driving private cars for travelling or working.
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, after the Chinese government increased taxes on oil prices, the movement on roads was reduced by 60%.
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, an additional action would be improving the public
traffic
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 facilities. So, the government should spend more money on improving public transport. In my opinion, if public transportation will have better facilities
people
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 will travel by bus or by train more often.
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, I strongly believe that solving
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 issue is very important because we will save our environment with less pollution from car gases and
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 we will save our lives.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • congested
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • economic growth
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • congestion charges
  • cycling infrastructure
  • traffic management
  • eco-friendly
  • optimization
  • alternative routes
  • commuting
  • vehicle emissions
  • mass transit
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • sustainable development
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