In a number of developing countries, the quality of air and water is declining day by day. State the problems due to this? Discuss the possible solutions for dealing with these problems.

In the modern
world
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more and more
goverments
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governments
government
find problems with water and air
polution
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pollution
.
For
this
reason
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a lot of people have some problems with their health like difficulties with
breath
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and swallowing.
Moreover
, because of the
polution produded
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pollution produced
by factories,
the
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fish, birds,
ant
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and other animals suffer. In my
essay
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I will discuss, the troubles, which are caused by producing carbon
deoxide
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dioxide
in the atmosphere and provide some solutions for them.
To begin
with, low
priotity
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priority
of ecological ways of
deffending
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defending
from toxins and acids in the water.
This
means, that folks
of
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overpoluted
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overpopulated
overplotted
countries drink
radiates
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from their tap.
For example
, imagine how children drink
this
water since their childhood and when they are growing their
oranism
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organism
become like a one big injure.
Tthis
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These
opportunities are awful
,
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because
population
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of toxic countries will die
farster
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faster
. And
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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