The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
providen
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provided
chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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the level of utilizing
a
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apply
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numerous
of
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apply
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household devices
while
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latter
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chart
evaluate
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evaluates
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how these appliances are detrimental to the environment in Australia.
Overall
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, the heating
energy
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system is used in the highest
percentage
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by
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apply
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42
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percent
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per cent
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while
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the lighting, refrigeration and
coaling
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cooling
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energy
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is not prefered
to
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apply
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use in household works, so these figures accounted for the less
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percent
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. As can be observed from the chart,
although
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the
percentage
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of utilizing heating
energy
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accounted for
by
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apply
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42
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percent
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per cent
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, the
emessions
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emissions
of
this
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appliance spread only by 15
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percent
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per cent
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. The other appliances are used by citizens by 15
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percent
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per cent
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,
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however
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a
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the
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detrimental effect of
this
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appliance is twofold from before. The
percentage
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of the water heating
energy
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system is utilized
by
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apply
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30
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percent
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per cent
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.
This
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percentage
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is the highest amount of
energy
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gas emissions in all of
categories
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the categories
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.
Also
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,
this
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figure equals its gas emissions result. In conclusion, in Australian
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housework
house works
houseworks
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,houseworks
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the heating and water heating
energy
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is utilized the highest amount, at the same time the other appliances
also
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is more devastated as well.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, percentage, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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