Some people believe that universities shold only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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opinion on
acceptance
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the acceptance
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of students to get
an
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admission
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the
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universities
like
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only well
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should provide opportunity and others says all candidates should
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treated.
According to
today's
education
system,
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reputed colleges were focusing more on scores than individual talents. The below paragraphs provided some pros and cons of
level
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the level
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of
education
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system. From childhood onwards, every
parents
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will choose
top
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the top
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schoolsto
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schools to
schools
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get
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good opportunities in future. Nowadays, to get
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admission
in
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pre nursing
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school itself conduct some internal exams to maintain the reputation. Because private school wants to fix their value
upcoming
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years. Private
education
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boards
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like IIM,
IIT
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institution
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institutions
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never consider
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candidate if
they
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their
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score in
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class is lesser than some constant marks or any internal exams. The management will believe those undergraduates were not eligible to get
highest
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the highest
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marks. Some parents never support
to
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their children to be with them who
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not good
in
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education
.
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, it is most common on going on society.
On the other hand
, most
of
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the people
tells
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to
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that opportunity should be given to everyone. From
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stage itself if
education
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the education
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board
blocking
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blocks
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them to come up
then
how they can show their ability is big
questions
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arising from
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the commitee
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commitee
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committee
. During
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secondary school may be
student
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a student
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has less ability to learn the subjects but once get mature , starts to understand the concept and show interest
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learning new things.
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most
of
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private
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the private
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organisations
considering
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the person
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person
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people
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as an employee from highly paid colleges. Every family may not have
financial
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strength to join and study.
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, the public
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, as well as private sector,
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as well as
private
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the private
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sector should consider the importance of
education
rather than reputation. In conclusion,
mentality
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the mentality
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of
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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on considering the highest and lowest marks couldn't
conside
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consider
as
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a
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valuable
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a valuable
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point
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points
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. According my opinion, knowledge and talent should play
major
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a major
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role to get
a seats
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in
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University rather than scoring on subjects.
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