Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school.

Many people consider that men and women should be taught in co-education.
However
, others argue that it is better for
students
to be educated in a separate
school
.
This
essay will discuss both views and will give my perspective. On the one hand,
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girls and boys in the mixed
school
tend to
do
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discrimination
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against sex
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.
In addition
, in some schools often happen
sex
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assault and rape.
For example
, today there are so many cases in the news report that
students
commit
sex
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in
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class. It might occur because the
students
who are in their puberty can not control their inappropriate
relationship
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. Meanwhile, on the positive side, men and women who are educated in co-education can obtain better communication skills between both genders.
On the other hand
,
students
in
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single-
sex
schools will be
more safe
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. Based on research in the world, schools which adjust to the same gender
school
in their country like in the Arab countries have the lowest cases of
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offense
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in the
school
.
Moreover
, the
students
will be more focused
about
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their education. They are more flexible in communications and not worried about the
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.
In other words
, some
students
are
more brave
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in how to convey their ideas in
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class.
As a result
, they will get better grades in their education. In conclusion,
although
males and females
are
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taught in
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mixed
school
will have better socialization in real life, often criminal
sex
acts happen in
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school
. In my opinion, I believe that it is better for
students
to educate in the same gender
school
since they will concentrate on the lessons and reach great achievements in their education.
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