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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts provide information about the jobs of graduate and postgraduate
students
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 who did not have full-time
work
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 after leaving college in 2008 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, the two types of
students
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 had a similar trend in their job destination. Most
students
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 with both degrees continued their studies,
while
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 voluntary
work
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 was the least preferred. Having stood at almost 30,000, the number of UK graduate
students
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 who choose
further
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 study peaked at the highest rank compared to other jobs, followed by that part-time
work
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 and unemployment accounting for 17,735 and 16,235, respectively. The
students
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 who did voluntary
work
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 were just under 5,000, as the
last
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 popular job.
However
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, the proportion of postgraduate
students
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 who did
further
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 study reached 2,725, being the most popular job, followed by that part-time
work
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 at 2,535.
In addition
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, postgraduate
students
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 were jobless approximately half of those who did
further
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 study and who got voluntary
work
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 reached 345.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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