the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia.

the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia.
The
Graph
below states the
two
categories of television shows
that is
being watched by males and females of different
age
group
in Australia. The percentage of
population
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the population
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watching these shows
are
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is
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represented on the left side of the chart and the
group
of
people
with their
age
lies on the bottom axis. Here we see there are
two
graphs given at the bottom with the information given on the
two
axis
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axes
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. The
two
most watched genres are reality shows and game shows which
people
in Australia love to watch. The
age
group
on the horizontal plane ranges from 16 to 45+
years
old for both the sex.
On the other hand
the
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, the percentage goes from 0-80.
Graph
A gives us the details on the reality show; it suggests that women are more interested
in
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than
the
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men with
approximation
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an approximation
the approximation
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of 35%.
Graph
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The graph
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follows the ascending form which gives an idea that
people
with
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the
age
group
16-24
years
nearly (52%) are less likely to see
this
sort of Program than the
age
group
of
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45
years
and above
with
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almost (69%). But if we talk about the
group
of
people
with the ages between (25-34,
35
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and 35
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-44
years
)
seems
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seem
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quite close (60% and 63%) respectively.
Whereas
, in
graph
second both the sex shows almost
same
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the same
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interest
for
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in
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this
particular show ie; game shows.
People
with
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the
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younger
age
(16-24
years
with 51%) and one with late middle
age
(45 and more
years
with nearly 69.5%) are fonder of these shows.
However
, middle
age
population
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populations
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(25-34 and 35-44
years
of
age
38%, 40% respectively) have less attraction for the same.
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