You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter, Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. Write at lease 150 words.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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to an
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advertisement
that you have given in
weekly
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the weekly
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magazine
last
week . I would prefer
myself
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apply
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for
this
baby sitter
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babysitter
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job
,
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because
i
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I
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have done my
masters
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in Pediatrics and child psychology back
to
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India .So it would help me to accomplish my experience in my field
job
. To elaborate
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on why
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i
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am appropriate for
this
job
,
i
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would say , I have vast knowledge about child behavioural
patterens
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patterns
and their nutritional requirements .
Moreover
,
i
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have experience in the same field for more than two years as
i
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was working with
the
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organisation
who
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cares for
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the child
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child
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in
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of their
mantal
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mental
and physical development .
Furthermore
,
i
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have heard from my friend about the spellbinding sights and scenic beauty of different places in Australia.
Therefore
, if
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would have
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to pursue my
job
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it would fulfil my two desires of working in my interested
job
as well as
to explore
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new places . To add on , my cousin is
also
living there , so in my vacant time from my work
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would spend my time with her . I will look forward
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your reply . Regards, Sandeep.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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