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It is difficult for people living in cities today get enough physical exercise. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve the problem

#people #cities #exercise #case
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In big
cities
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 skyscrapers are increasing enormously ,
,
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meanwhile
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people
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 lose their place for physical
exercise
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.I think the government should have an eye on that issue and
people
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 can go to the
gym
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 centres for
exercise
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. In
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 era of technology, the tower block number is flourished hugely in big
cities
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, which occupy most of the free areas in town .
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, the city is the central point for all facilities, where
people
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 from the countryside move to
cities
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 for education,medical , transportation and so on .Because of that skyscrapers ratio has grown up every year eloquently.
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 why
cities
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people
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 have fewer places for
exercise
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.
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,I live in Sylhet and
can't barely
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 find any place for
exercise
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 because everywhere I go there would be a building or construction work is ongoing.In the afternoon we have no space for playing outdoor games.Paramountly, its effect our body and mind. To overcome
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 issue , the government should take some necessary steps.
First
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of
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administration
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have
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 to create a free park where
people
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 can go and walk or
exercise
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.
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this
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, how to
exercise
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 by seating at a home program like that might be another good option.
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,individuals can go to a
gym
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 in the nearest
gym
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 centre.
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, every day I devoted one hour to
exercise
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 in the
gym
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 centre.Where I see
people
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 from my area
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 join in
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. I believe that
people
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 should
exercise
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 in every possible way because it helps them to fit in physically and mentally . In conclusion, the major reason behind losing free
area
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 for
exercise
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 is the growing number of big buildings.Management should take the necessary steps as soon as possible and we can do
exercise
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 in our home or by joining a
gym
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 centre .
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