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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges related not only to the environment, but pollution and education as well. What problems your country will face in next years.

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For many years, our world has grappled with a range of issues,
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 as environmental concerns and pollution.
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 some progress has been made, there is still much work to be done. In my home country,
China
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, several issues have emerged as unexpected challenges over the past five years. One major challenge is the significant decline in population. Despite still being the most populous country in the world, accounting for a quarter of the global population,
China
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's strict "One Child" policy over the past 40 years has resulted in a rapid decline in population since 2010.
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, the demographic growth rate reached zero in 2022, which has had negative consequences for international trade and domestic economic exchanges. Another challenge that
China
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 faces is the scarcity of skilled labour, particularly in the fields of IT and AI. With a decline in low-wage labour,
China
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 is struggling to keep up with the technological innovations of the next generation. The lack of emphasis on fundamental research and an overreliance on practical applications of technology have made it difficult for
China
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 to maintain its status as the "world's factory" in global trade. Despite these challenges,
China
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 is a remarkable nation with unique advantages and room for growth. The government is working to create policies to address these challenges and prepare for the future.
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