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People are living in a ‘throwaway society,’ using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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Most individuals these days utilize stuff only for a small period and
than
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then
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 toss it
to
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into
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 the bin. Before purchasing
some thing
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something
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 people do not really
concider
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consider
 for what and for how long they will use
a certain products
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certain products
a certain product
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, causing a throwaway society.
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Available
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Aviable
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 solution for
that is
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 that humans need to make a
list
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 of
things
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 they really need before going to the
supermaket
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supermarket
 or shopping. Making a record of
thing
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things
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 you need will make your life easier and will prevent you from throwing away any products. The percentage of objects that are being utilized
growth
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grows
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 every year.
This
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 issue appears because people intend to buy
things
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 without thinking. They get good before thinking do they need it or not.
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, it causes
to
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too
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much
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 useless objects that will go
to
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into
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 the trash later.
This
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 problem can outgrow
to
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apply
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bigger ones.
To
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 much
wastes
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waste
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 can cause global warming and
shortage
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a shortage
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 of goods. A solution for that complication is making a
list
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 of food, cloth,
products
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and products
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 you need. Making a
list
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 will not only save you from
utiling
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utilising
utilizing
things
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 you bought,
in addition
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,
it will
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but it will also
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 save you from unnecessary
invesments
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investments
.
Nevertheless
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, it can help you to help to save more money for more
neady
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new
things
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. Meaning to say, making a
list
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 will only benefit you. Before going to the supermarket I always think of the stocks I really need. It saves me from irrational purchases. In conclusion, I want to say that human
being
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beings
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have
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tohave
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 make effort to
prefent
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prevent
"throwaway
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a "throwaway
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 society". They need to understand that getting unneeded goods will only cause more damage than good.
THey
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They
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 need to write down everything they need before going to the shopping or grocery store.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throwaway society
  • consumer culture
  • material possession
  • status symbol
  • planned obsolescence
  • disposable items
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • environmental impact
  • waste management
  • sustainability
  • immediate gratification
  • psychological implications
  • resource consumption
  • advertising influence
  • economic effects
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