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With the recent developments online, people can leave their views or opinions about certain goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing?

#developments #people #goods #services
Thesedays
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These days
 the usage of
ecommers
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e-commerce
 exhibit
a
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significant increase and
thus
 buyers can drop
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a review
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review
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reviews
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 about some
goods
 and services they have brought.In my
opinion
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this
 trend has both
negetive
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negative
 and
postive
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positive
 effects on the convenience of buyers
as well as
 sellers. on the one hand,leaving views of
product
 can
helps
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 most
of
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people
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the people
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 in a plethora of ways.
Firstly
,it helps to
jugde
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judge
 the
product
 by
analizing
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analyzing
 the opinion given for the
goods
 by the
people
.
Besides
 that in that way consumers are
also
 secure to be cheated by
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.
moreover
,nowadays masses
also
 post
some
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pictures of the
product
 which make
more easy
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 for
the
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consumers to pick
a
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 correct one
according to
 their need.
Furthermore
,by
examine
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 the requirements of the
people
 it will be easy for sellers to make a change in their
goods
 or service for attracting more and more
people
.
on the other hand
 ,despite the fact judgements by
individual
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an individual
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 for the
goods
 and service has a significant amount of merits but
sometime
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sometimes
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also
 may cause
inconvenice
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inconvenience
 for both buyers
as well as
seller
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 because many
of
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people
 give fake reviews which
sets
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a bads
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bads
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bad
 impression to the consumers and they avoid to buy
such
 type of
product
.
Infact
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In fact
 some
ecommers
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e-commerce
site
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sites
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also
do
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 fraud by posting forgery
opinion
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opinions
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.
Inconlusion
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In conclusion
,
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the
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people
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opinon
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opinion
for
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on
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 purchasing
goods
 and service provides good knowledge to buy
but
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we have to
aware
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from
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 the fake review posted
in
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ecommers
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e-commerce
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