Some people believe women are better leaders than men. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #women #leaders #men

Since

then

, it is long known that men are always destined to lead.

Nevertheless

, there are those who argue that

women

can perform

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task better.

However

, I strongly do not concur with the same view.

To begin

with,

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leader

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a very difficult responsibility to handle and

women

cannot be better than men in performing

this

task. A

leader

should represent toughness and authority to their constituents and cannot afford to show any weakness.

This

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specific characteristics of a

leader

are difficult to be seen in

women

since they are normally interpreted as

kind hearted

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and calm.

Therefore

, the people under their reign might not take them seriously.

Furthermore

, opportunistic wrongdoers may take it as a chance to commit

crime

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a crime

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since in their mind, there might be a chance for them to be spared

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a lighter sentence since the

leader

is a woman.

In addition

women

can

be greatly influence

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by certain people or

situation

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situations

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that can compromise and alter an operation or plan.

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if a

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person committed a murder and a sentence of

death

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the death

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penalty through lethal injection is given to the prisoner there are certain groups like Human Rights Commission

who

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that

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appeals

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to reduce it to life imprisonment.

Therefore

such

order

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is being delayed and justice for the family of the victim is not being served.

To conclude

women

cannot be suited to be a

leader

as they cannot pose as tough and autocratic as men can.

Also

, their

decision making

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skills can be greatly

influence

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by other people

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, therefore,

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therefore

impending

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the task needed to be done.

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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