Some people think that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs(for example,working for a charity,improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children)

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It has been suggested that high
school
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students should take part in unpaid community service
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program
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,as part of their
school
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educational programs.Undoubtedly many schools have added
in
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their curriculum and
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opportunity
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opportunities
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to obtain work experience
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these are
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In my opinion, they should engage them in a
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community service
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because these activities
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a wide range of
voluable
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valuable
skills. On the one hand, Some people
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that doing
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volunteering
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work can distract them from their studies.
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,they are suggested to
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on their homework after
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period which will help them
to
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their academic
perrfermance
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performance
. Some subjects like
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mathematics
,
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need extra focus which is not possible at
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hours.
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,Life skills are very important for students as they are the future citizen of
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society.They will have to take higher responsibility. For
instant
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,They can learn team effort,
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coodination
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coordination
at work
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involving
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them
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in the junior football team.
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to that the quality of kindness will develop
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working in a charity
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.Helping in the hospital ,they can get the divine quality
sympathy
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and apathy. Unfortunately,
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these young adults engage
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in TV programs or browsing
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the internet or
in
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facebook
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,
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and twitor
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twitor
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twitter
after
school
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instead
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of doing their homework.By doing charitable or community service, they will be more creative.The creativity can reflect in their CV as well
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also
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help in their employment. In Conclusion, I think
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is a very good idea ,and
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program
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should be included in high
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as compulsory
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