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Some people think that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs(for example,working for a charity,improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children)

#people #community #service #part #school #programs #charity #neighbourhood #sports #children
It has been suggested that high
school
 students should take part in unpaid community service
program
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,as part of their
school
 educational programs.Undoubtedly many schools have added
in
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 their curriculum and
providing
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an
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opportunity
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 to obtain work experience
how ever
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however
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 these are
opttional
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optional
. .
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In my opinion, they should engage them in a
fee
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community service
program
 because these activities
gives
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 a wide range of
voluable
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valuable
 skills. On the one hand, Some people
belive
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 that doing
volunteeing
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volunteering
volunteer
 work can distract them from their studies.
Therefore
,they are suggested to
fucus
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 on their homework after
school
 period which will help them
to
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 their academic
perrfermance
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performance
. Some subjects like
mathmetics
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mathematics
,
science
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and science
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 need extra focus which is not possible at
school
limited
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during limited
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 hours.
On the other hand
,Life skills are very important for students as they are the future citizen of
the
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society.They will have to take higher responsibility. For
instant
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,They can learn team effort,
proper
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and proper
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coodination
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coordination
 at work
while
involving
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them
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themselves
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 in the junior football team.
In addition
 to that the quality of kindness will develop
while
 working in a charity
program
.Helping in the hospital ,they can get the divine quality
sympathy
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of sympathy
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 and apathy. Unfortunately,
Nowdays
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 these young adults engage
them
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in TV programs or browsing
in
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the internet or
in
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on
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facebook
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,
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and twitor
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twitor
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twitter
 after
school
instead
 of doing their homework.By doing charitable or community service, they will be more creative.The creativity can reflect in their CV as well
but
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also
 help in their employment. In Conclusion, I think
this
 is a very good idea ,and
This
program
 should be included in high
school
 as compulsory
activities
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.
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