Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that,
arts
is one the most significant part of one’s life and teaching
this
subject in schools to children at an early age is more likely making them
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better grades in other subjects. I totally agree with the fact that
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this
allows
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students to acquire knowledge
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relating
reacting
to new things.
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is why
arts
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a compulsory subject in schools. One of the major
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studying
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in
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schools is that
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it makes a child multi-talented. A child is more likely to
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perform
their best in other activities
such
as sports
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while
learning new tricks in
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studies
as well as
technology.
According to
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recent research conducted by
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of Alberta on
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children from various
school
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found that
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students
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who
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learning
arts
were performing exceptionally well in their studies compared to others.
In addition
, they were even found more creative
while
accomplishing some tasks or doing assignments. Another advantage of why school, nowadays,
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emphasises
more on
arts
is because it helps
an individuals
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to learn about the past and get them connected with their roots and traditions.
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abilities to tackle any problem and come up with
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ideas for solving any problem. Educational institutions these days,
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also
provide children
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lesson
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lessons
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on
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thinking approach which is
also
a part of
arts
, which can prove very helpful for them in the coming future.
For instance
, design thinking provides them
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to break down any wicked problem and look for its solutions. In conclusion, it is indeed true that
arts
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not help a student to perform
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in academics but
also
in other aspects of life
such
as problem-solving and multi-tasking and on top of that, it
also
helps an individual to stay connected to the ancient history and their deep roots of humanity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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