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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The given two maps compare some reconstructions of Grange Park between 1920 and today.
Overall
,there were many gardens and few facilities in the past.
However
,most of them have been turned into other conveniences.
In particular
,before the transformation of the park,there were three rose gardens,which were located in the north-western,
north-eastern
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and north-eastern
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 areas and in the bottom left-hand corner of the map with the seats adjacent to them. In the middle of the map, the fountain was situated and there was a stage for musicians on the left side of it.The Pond for water plants and some seats were in the
north-east
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northeast
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 and bottom right edge of the drawing.
However
, today there is a big rose garden rebuilt
instead
 of the fountain and the stage has been removed to make a way for an Amphitheatre for concerts.
Instead
 of the pond and rose garden in the top right-hand part of the outline a children's play area and cafe have been built. A beautiful water feature has been introduced after demolishing a glass house. The Rose garden in the top left part and two entrances in the North and South remained unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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