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Some educationalists say every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion that the teaching of playing a musical
instrument
 should be given to youngsters.
Besides
 its merits, I am not convinced of
this
 opinion for some reasons. On the credit side, there are plausible reasons why the knowledge of playing an
instrument
 should be imparted to students.
Firstly
, studying musical tools can help
children
 to enhance their concentration and discipline. To become a talented
instrument
 player means that
children
 need to undergo a rigorous training process to enhance their
overall
 hand dexterity.
Secondly
,
this
 is
also
 a method to release mental stress in
children
. As youngsters often get bored and depressed after a hectic schedule, listening to the sound of a musical
instrument
 is a recommended way to sweep away their depression and recharge energy. On the debit side, there are
also
 some downsides to consider. As every human being has
their
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different abilities, and capabilities, not every child has an interest in or aptitude for music.
This
 means that not every child is willing to commit their free time to
learn
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 how to play a musical
instrument
.
Additionally
, the cost of musical
equipments
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equipment
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 and lessons has been the subject of debate. The amount of budget needed to buy musical instruments and hire a tutor is extremely high which
not
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 every middle-class
parents
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 can afford.
Consequently
, the number of
children
can
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who can
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 not meet the demand to study musical tools is considerable. To recapitulate,
although
 learning a musical
instrument
 can
brings
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 a variety of advantages to child development,
i
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 strongly believe
the
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that
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 teaching
of
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this
 is not suitable for most families
due to
 its cost of
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and the requirement for
time
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the time
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 commitment.
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