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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary world, it is too hard to survive so, governments decided to provide an average
income
 to run their family even for the unemployed individuals. I partially agree with both the standards that
people
 from poor backgrounds make
use
 of
this
money
 and live on.
However
,
this
money
 should not be provided to rich communities.
Firstly
, It gives several benefits for the
people
 who are from the below poverty line, make
use
 of
this
income
 and run their families.
For example
, humans who are residing in the USA will receive an average monthly
income
 to live on.
Furthermore
,
people
 can satisfy their small needs and even they can save some
money
 for future
use
.
Therefore
, these are reasons why governments should provide necessary schemes for the
people
.
However
,
this
money
 should not be provided to each and every
people
, there should be some eligibility level to avail of the scheme.
For example
, it should be available only to
people
 who are unemployed and below
poverty
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line
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 so they can
use
this
money
 wisely,
this
 means a lot to them. Even though they cannot fully rely on
this
income
. they can make
use
 of
this
 currency to buy groceries and clothing which
is
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are
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basic needs for them. Before implementing the scheme they should consider the pros which help them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic income
  • financial security
  • unemployed
  • poverty
  • support
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • taxes
  • budgetary strain
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