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teen and adult use of socia networking sites and twitter - change over time

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This
 line chart shows the proportion of teenagers and
adults
 active on social
media
 sites and
Twitter
 between 2006 and 2012.
Overall
, it is obvious that teens have a consistently higher adoption rate of social networking sites and
Twitter
 than
adults
 over the entire six-year period. The gap between social
media
 use of youngsters and
adults
 was quite significant between 2006 and 2010
,
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 but became far less pronounced from 2011 on.
Further
 analysis of the data reveals that 55% of minors utilized social networking sites in 2006.
This
 percentage steadily increased by between 5 to 8% each year, reaching 80% in 2011 and levelling off to 81% in 2012. At the introduction of
Twitter
 in 2009, the teen adoption rate of
this
 new social
media
 platform stood at 8%.
This
 number quickly incremented to 24% in 2012. As far as the adult population is concerned, it can be noted that only 16% of
this
 segment of
population
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 was active on social
media
 in 2006.
This
 figure gradually increased in the first two years and
then
 experienced a steep growth until reaching its peak of 67% in 2012. The proportion of
adults
 using
Twitter
 only saw a modest increase of 4% between 2011 and 2012.
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