The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The line graph illustrates the demand for
electricity
in England during common days in
winter
and
summer
,
while
the pie chart gives information about the consuming
electricity
in a casual English house.
Overall
, from the line graph and pie
chart
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it can be seen that Englishman use
electricity
more commonly in
winter
than in
summer
and they employ it mostly for heating rooms and water. The daily demand for
electricity
is more than 30 000 units in
winter
and it reaches a peak between 21 and 24 o`clock,
although
in
summer
the consumption is lower than 20 000 units. So that it can be seen from both in
winter
and
summer
people tend to use
electricity
rarely in the early mornings and it increases
at the end
of the day. The pie chart depicts that more than half of all
electricity
is consumed for warming houses and water to use,
whereas
17,5 per cent of
electricity
is used for ovens, kettles and washing machines.
Then
, the rest of it divides equally for employing lighting, TV, radio and vacuum cleaners, food mixers,
electricity
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tools.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, winter, summer with synonyms.
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