The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates how many
books
were read by both genders (
men
and
women
) at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
, even though
women
read more
books
than
men
in 2011, their reading fell below the level of
men
in 2014.
Whereas
men
didn't show a decline since 2011 and overtook
women
in mid-2013 in reading. As can be seen from the graph,
women
read 5000
books
while
men
read 2000 fewer
books
than
women
in 2011. The number of
books
read by
men
steadily rose from 3000 to 4000,
while
among
women
the rate was three times higher from 5000 to 8000 between 2011 and mid-2012. Since mid-2012, the number of
books
read by
men
dramatically rose to 10000 in mid-2013 and intersected at
this
mark with
women
that a gradual rise between mid-2012 and mid-2013.
However
, in 2014, their numbers fell back to 8000 again
while
men
peaked at 14,000
books
.
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