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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates how many
books
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 were read by both genders (
men
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 and
women
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) at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
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, even though
women
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 read more
books
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 than
men
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 in 2011, their reading fell below the level of
men
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 in 2014.
Whereas
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men
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 didn't show a decline since 2011 and overtook
women
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 in mid-2013 in reading. As can be seen from the graph,
women
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 read 5000
books
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while
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men
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 read 2000 fewer
books
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 than
women
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 in 2011. The number of
books
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 read by
men
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 steadily rose from 3000 to 4000,
while
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 among
women
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 the rate was three times higher from 5000 to 8000 between 2011 and mid-2012. Since mid-2012, the number of
books
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 read by
men
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 dramatically rose to 10000 in mid-2013 and intersected at
this
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 mark with
women
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 that a gradual rise between mid-2012 and mid-2013.
However
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, in 2014, their numbers fell back to 8000 again
while
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men
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 peaked at 14,000
books
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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