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The Popularity Of Fashion Clothes Shows The Tendency Of Human Beings To Copy One Another. Do you agree or disagree?

#popularity #fashion #clothes #tendency #beings #copy
fashion
clothes
 have been developed since
long
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 time ago. for
couple
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decade
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 now,
people
 have
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
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 to follow what
popular
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around
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in
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 their environment.
this
 essay will discuss
about
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this
 issue.
fashion
 trends have changed considerably over many
year
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years
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, yet
it
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they
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 still
bring
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brings
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 the same result.
people
 will prefer to imitate the current popular
fashion
clothes
.
i
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I
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 believe that the person who
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tries
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tries
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try
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tries
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 to copy other
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people's
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people
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people's
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 styles has
consider
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considered
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whether
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either
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whether
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 the
clothes
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are
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match
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a match
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for
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apply
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them or not. they won't copy if they don't like the looks of the mode.
moreover
, many
fashion
 brands hired
model
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models
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 or
influencer
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influencers
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 to be
a
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apply
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role
model
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models
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 for
a
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apply
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certain
fashion
clothes
. either
its
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it's
it is
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 a big brand
such
 as
gucci
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Gucci
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,
zara
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Zara
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, and many more or even a local brand, they will try to create a trend so, many
crowd
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crowds
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 will follow what they have
been
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apply
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created. they are
sucess
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success
 when a lot of parties are
influnced
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influenced
 by what they have built.
i
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I
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nevertheless
 believe that
copy
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copying
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 one another is fine if the topic is about mode
trend
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trends
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. even many brands create a campaign so many
people
 will follow what they are created. almost all the crowds
also
 know what things to follow or avoid.
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