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Some people feel the best way to reduce the member of accidents on the road is to further limit the speed of vehicles. Others think that there are better ways to tackle this issue. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Each year, many
people
 lose their lives
while
 driving.
This
 is because most individuals are violating
the
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traffic
 rules by breaking
the
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traffic
 signals and overspeeding. It has been argued that
occurrence
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 of
road
accidents
 can be minimized by dropping the allowed limit for driving a vehicle on the
road
,
while
 others have the opinion that there are several other ways to decline
this
 rate as well. Millions of aggressive
people
 drive recklessly and abide by
the
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traffic
 laws, even on poor roads, which
also
 impact public property. Reducing the speed limit will eventually affect the number of
accidents
 and casualties.
Moreover
,
people
 will get used to driving their vehicles safely, and
this
 will result in lesser chaos on the roads, and fewer
traffic
 jams after
accidents
.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that minimizing the speed limit is not the only option. There are several other ways as well, like
on ground
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 strict
law
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agaisnt
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against
over speeders
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.
Additionally
, the government should think of ways to spread awareness regarding the consequences and how their selfish act is impacting other
people
, educate the
people
 on how to behave
while
 driving, and what measures to take if they feel their safety is in danger
due to
 some other
vehivle's
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vehicle's
 driver actions.
In addition
 to
this
, the path holes should be
timely
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 fixed as well, as it is
also
 one of the many causes
for
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road
accidents
.
To conclude
,
road
accidents
 can only be minimized by the mutual efforts of the government and the
people
.
People
needs
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 to follow these rules in order to avoid any mishap. Government should
setup
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 a proper system to educate and maintain law and order implementations.
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