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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

#people #places #visit #food #attitudes
Some people believe that it is safer to keep
in
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doing the same
things
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familiar
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within
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.
On the contrary
, others think that, trying to change and experience different fields
give
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 a soul to
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life
. From my perspective,
the
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life
deserve
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 to take some bold decisions and
trying
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 new
things
 that make
the
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life
 more exciting. On the one hand, it is true to say that it is necessary to have some stability in
the
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life
, doing the same
things
 every day and having a normal career for
long
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 time even eating
same
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 recipes maybe increase the feeling of
secure
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 and constancy for some folks , that makes them do not dare to change their reality whatever it is . Another key
things
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 to remember,
continuation
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 on the same style of
life
 maintains what they have as some people`s ideas, changing
life
`s routine maybe exposure you to
loss
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 what you have ,
for instance
 , an officer who
work
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 for ten hours per day , despite any potential new career , never thinks about any alternative and try to keep himself in the save zone .
On the other hand
,
another
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 peers of people consider
the
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life
 has no soul without some difficulties and some challenges, the world has a lot to enjoy
with
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and it is required to
has
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 some activities which make the lifecycle more renewed and productive,
for example
, trying to travel for another country and socialize with another culture, testing several dishes makes you feel fresh regardless for the other benefits which give more energy to start a new day. In conclusion, in spite of the positive aspects that the
life
 routine has from stability and
secure
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, in my opinion ,efforts to
more
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succeeds
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 by
overcome
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overcoming
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life
`s challenges and difficulties and
attempt
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attempting
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 to do new
things
 make
the
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life
 pulse again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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