The chart shows monthly retail sales of different kinds of the stores in the USA last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reportign the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows monthly retail sales of different kinds of the stores in the USA last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reportign the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the previous
year
how much millions of dollars were spent on retail sales of
hobby
Fix the agreement mistake
hobbies
show examples
, shoes and bookstores in the USA.
Overall
, Shoe
stores
were the leader in sales the whole
year
and
hobby
stores
were the
second
one
at the end
of the
year
. Bookstoresstores were the
second
one at the beginning and in the middle of the
year
but over time they fell down to the third position. In the first half of the
year
, Shoe
stores
had a huge lead on the market with nearly 3000
million
dollars. Bookstores started in the
second
position with over 1000
million
and go down to nearly 500
million
in February. Meanwhile,
hobby
stores
continue steadily. In the
second
half of the
year
, Shoe
stores
had a huge increase between July and August. It went up to over 3500
million
at
this
time.
Then
it had a huge crush in the next month and after that, it reached a peak
at the end
of the
year
with nearly 4000
million
.
Hobby
stores
had a surge in September and over doubled.
On the other hand
, Book
stores
had an increase in July and after it goes down to the same level as before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, hobby, stores, second, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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