The chart shows monthly retail sales of different kinds of the stores in the USA last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reportign the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows monthly retail sales of different kinds of the stores in the USA last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reportign the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the previous
year
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how much millions of dollars were spent on retail sales of
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hobby
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hobbies
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, shoes and bookstores in the USA.
Overall
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, Shoe
stores
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were the leader in sales the whole
year
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and
hobby
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stores
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were the
second
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one
at the end
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of the
year
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. Bookstoresstores were the
second
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one at the beginning and in the middle of the
year
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but over time they fell down to the third position. In the first half of the
year
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, Shoe
stores
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had a huge lead on the market with nearly 3000
million
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dollars. Bookstores started in the
second
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position with over 1000
million
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and go down to nearly 500
million
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in February. Meanwhile,
hobby
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stores
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continue steadily. In the
second
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half of the
year
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, Shoe
stores
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had a huge increase between July and August. It went up to over 3500
million
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at
this
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time.
Then
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it had a huge crush in the next month and after that, it reached a peak
at the end
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of the
year
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with nearly 4000
million
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.
Hobby
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stores
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had a surge in September and over doubled.
On the other hand
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, Book
stores
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had an increase in July and after it goes down to the same level as before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, hobby, stores, second, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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