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Public health is becoming an urgent issue nowadays. Some argue that governments should create nutrition and food choice laws to improve public health, while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 of the society has become an important problem in recent years.
It
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is argue
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by
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some
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that nutrition and
food
 policies should be created by
authorties
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authorities
 of countries in order to enhance individuals'
health
,
as
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while
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 others
asserts
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 that it
is belong
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 to
people
's option. Taking some roles of governments in terms of creating
food
 laws may be beneficial for
people
. Looking from the other side of
this
 issue, it depends
to
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people
's responsibility. On one the hand, it gives positive effects
to
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people
 that governments create some policies in
favor
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 of
nutrion
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nutrition
. Most
people
 have less information about
foods
 and their ingredients
hence
, they may do some faults in terms of
food
 selection. Governments can guide
people
 to choose beneficial
foods
 for
human's
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human
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health
by
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 some regulations. They may
also
 enforce
food
 manufacturers and agricultural businesses to present healthy
foods
 and goods for
people
 by laws and inspections.
Thus
,
people
's
nutrion
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nutrition
 and
health
 quality can develop.
On the other hand
,
people
 have to possess the responsibility of
food
 preference.
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the
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technologic
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 improvements,
people
 have taken a chance to get information easier than past. They can explore
about
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food
's contents if they want to inform from many sources.
In addition
, many programmes and conferences have been arranged to raise awareness in terms of
variety
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the variety
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 of
foods
.
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,
people
 can figure out their issues
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nutrion
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nutrition
 without any support. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied
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this
 discussion.
Although
,
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people
 have been qualified with improvements to sustain their
health
 about nutrition, in my opinion, it would get more benefits that
governemnts
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governments
 may intervene by some regulations and laws.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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