The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavant.

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the bar graph illustrates the number of graduates who did not get a full-time job after finishing their academics in the year 2008.

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, there are 4 different reasons which are part-time

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, voluntary

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study and unemployment.

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, more people at undergraduate and postgraduate prefer to pursue

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studies and the least is social activities .

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the first graph, 17,735 people worked part-time jobs which

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less than the data from postgraduates. For voluntary

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, there are only 3500 students, which is the least proportion preferred by both graduates. 29,665 graduates prefer to pursue higher education. At

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, more than half of the students are unemployed 16,235. Followed by the second graph, the data is show a similar trend as undergrads. 2,535 postgraduates

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part-time. 345 students are doing voluntary

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. After ,graduation most people prefer to do

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studies 2,725. The unemployment rate is 1625.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavant.

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robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?