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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will provide better care for their kids.

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Nowadays all the parents going to work for their life. So they bring their
kids
 to the childcare or with their
grandparents
.In my opinion is the best way
grandparents
 would take care of their
children
. Let's see my point of view on
this
 topic and how it goes. First of all , Either Childcare or preschool
also
 takes responsibility for the
kids
 in a good way . They were teaching education , playing games and some extracurricular activities which are really needful for the kid's future and they corrected their mischievous behaviour in a polite manner.
Then
 they are providing breakfast , lunch and some snacks in between which the
kids
 love to munch it.
to begin
 ,with the morning section
children
 study some basics of preschool subjects,
in addition
,in ,addition the afternoon section they are playing with their friends to improve their social activities among them, it really helps to improve kid's behaviour in public . They are getting a good atmosphere either in school or Kinder Garden. Second of all ,
children
 live with their
grandparents
 getting an inheritance of knowledge from their day-to-day activities of them naturally. I believe that
kids
' first 5 years are the most important time
while
 they growing up because at
this
 stage they observe things from their elders.
For instance
, they learn kindness, how to behave towards elder people, moral support and adding up gardening, cleaning the house, farming etc.These will really help them to survive independently in society. They are getting healthy home foods from their
grandparents
. It is a lot of possibilities to get a good attitude in their life . Here I conclude that
children
's life with
grandparents
 are safer and save money whose parents spend so much money on childcare. In ,India there are so many old age people left on the roads and in old-age homes, if we try to take care of our parents they will grow our
kids
 in a responsible way for society. In the future
children
 will learn about family responsibilities and relationships. They are can not get into other organizations.
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