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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph reveals
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 types of
information
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 requested at a tourist office in the United Kingdom between January and June.
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, people demanded travel data by telephone and in person saw a continuous increase.
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, there was a switch in the position of requesting
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 by letter or email. In January,
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 methods of data requesting were under 1000 respectively,
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 demanding
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 in person rose dramatically and reached a peak at almost 2000 in June.
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, it fluctuated for the tourist required
traveling
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 data by telephone in the first
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 months and grew rapidly in the
last
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three
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 months, becoming the second high to 1600
at the end
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 of the period.
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, the number of asking for tourism
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 through letters and emails underwent a downward trend as the figure dropped from around 750 to 350 in six months.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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