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 university in 2000 and 2010.
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spanish
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used ,which takes 30 per cent in 2000 and 35 % in 2010 ,
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spanish
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 takes 30%
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 all the
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, and another 10% know
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 only .
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, 15% of
students
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.
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, 20 % of them do not know another
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 the second biggest proportion after
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talker
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. in 2010, 35% used
spanish
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 as a second
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 20% 0f them used another
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.
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.
also
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