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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.
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The given line chart shows the percentages of
tourists
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 visiting four sorts of Brighton attractions (
art
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gallery
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,
pavilion
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,
pier
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, and festival ) between 1980 and 2010 in England.
Overall
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, the figures of
tourists
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 who
traveled
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 to the
pavilion
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 and the
art
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gallery
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 went up and down in
this
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 period. At the same time, the proportion of
travelers
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travellers
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 who went to the
pier
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 grew slightly. Meanwhile, the number of sightseers to join the festival remained fairly unchanged. From 1980 to 1995, the number of
tourists
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 who
traveled
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 to the
pavilion
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 rose sharply from about 25% and peaked at nearly 50%. The percentages of
tourists
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 visiting the
art
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gallery
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 and the
pier
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 grew to almost 40% and 15% in 1985 and
then
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 decreased to 20% and 10%, respectively. The figure for sightseers to the
pier
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 fluctuated around 10%. In 2010, the proportion of sightseers to the
pavilion
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 and the
art
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gallery
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 fell gradually to 30% and 10%, respectively. At the same time, there was a slight climb in the proportion of
travelers
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travellers
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 who went to the
pier
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, and the number of
tourists
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 who
traveled
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 to the festival was still unchanged, nearly 28%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, art, gallery, pavilion, pier with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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