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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that
news
 does not have any influence on human life and it has only drawbacks
such
 as spending time on unnecessary activities
as
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 reading newspapers, magazines and watching TV. But I completely disagree with
this
 statement and I will write several arguments to prove it.
Overall
,
news
 has a big importance on people to educate them and to be in touch with society so that individuals know many trendy problems or situations that have occurred all around the
world
. First of all, nowadays all adolescents, adults and even children have smartphones and it helps them to be conscious of breaking
news
 so
that
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this
 can be useful. It means that teenagers can be safe if they are aware of a dangerous situation and adults
also
 may use trendy
news
 to develop their projects at work.
For example
, in South Korea
news
 are very important and all students at High School pay so much attention to
news
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 to be educated about significant changes which can happen in the future.
On the other hand
, the
news
 is a huge source of information that work as the connector of culture, people and relationship.
In other words
, countries or inhabitants who live in
such
 areas where
news
 does have not an effect on
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 of government or
in
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the whole country will not be in touch with the
world
.
For instance
, in 2021,
the
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recent research showed that in
modern
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the modern
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world
existe
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existed
 some places which
far
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 from civilisation and they live
with
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tolerating it,
therefor
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therefore
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 these nations do not aware
about
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of
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 anything that happen in the
world
. In conclusion, the
news
 is an important tool for individuals for being a part of society and to achieve
personal
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 desires because it gives information about tendencies in the modern
world
.
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