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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
char
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chart
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 illustrate how regularly of
USA
 citizen
eating
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 at fast
food
restaurant
 among
people
in
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 2003 until 2013. The Information
divided
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 into six categories that the
respondens
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respondents
respondent
 should be chosen,
such
 as every day, several times a
week
, once a
week
, once or twice a month, a few times a year, and never. The
value
 of the bar chart is
delivering
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 using
percentage
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 of
people
. The comparison of
this
 chart focus on three
period
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 of the year. It
consist
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 of 2003, 2006 and 2013.
Overall
, the majority
people
 of
USA
eating
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ate
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 at fast
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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 once a
week
on
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 2003 and 2006 and once or twice a month
on
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 2013. The intensively
is
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increase over the years.
However
, the
category
 of ‘Never’ has
decrease
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 that proving
of
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USA
people
willing
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are willing
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 to eat at fast
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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. The percentage of
people
 eating fast
food
 “every day” at
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the restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 is decreasing
of
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 the year
start
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 from 4% to 3%. It is
a good news
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 that
USA
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US
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people
aware
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are aware
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 to change
bad
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a bad
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habit
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habits
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.
Beside
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 that things,
on
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category
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the category
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 “several times a
week
” the
value
have
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 fluctuation
on
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 the third period that
the
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higher is on 2006
is
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about 20% and the lower is on 2013
is
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and is
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 about 16. For the “once a
week
”
category
 shown the dynamic
value
 of the percentage with the biggest score
on
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in
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 2006 is 33%. The unique phenomenon
on
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illustrate
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 is in the
category
 of “once or twice a month” that
the
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point
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 out in 2013 with
the
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value
 of 33%. All in all, the trend data is quite normal and the habit of eating well is exist
on
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USA
people
 because they are regularly eating fast
food
 just once a
week
 (
approximatelly
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approximately
 25% of the respondent) and the other one who is keeping eat well ( health
food
) that never try fast
food
 is approximately on 4%. Eating fast
food
 is a bad habit for our health, but you still eat
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normal
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the normal
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 size
on
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 your body.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, food, restaurant, people, week, value, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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