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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns ad cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #ad #cities
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world
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 everyone like
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a
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new fashion
item
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items
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. All the things we are looking not buy at
same
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 places. So people have been choosing online shopping.I agreed that it's reduced the sales of retailers.lets we will discuss
this
 in detail. First of all , In online shopping
everything
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 we will be getting
in
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 a website so people
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no
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 need to walk away
for
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 many places. As a
results
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 each and every
product
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 they
were
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like to buy
in
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website
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. They
were
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never looked up other shops in town because of their
fulfillment
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 in their shopping. Second of all , So
much
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of
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vouchers and
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has
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 been provided by online sellers. But it is very rare to get in
retail
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a retail
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 mall . Different types of clothing and
colors
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 are available rather than the shops.the most important are all sizes which
is
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 difficult to get all sizes in store. In modern technology and transport their getting ordered items too fast. So people were choosing
simple
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 and fastest way. In sum , I agree that increasing online sales will havoc
the
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 city's
shop
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shops
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. As a
results
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of
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so much of shop has been closed
due to
 their profit
lose
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. We are
the
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responsible for shoppers.take care of them and support them.
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