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Increasing car uses in many global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#car #cities #vehicles #city #centre
The map depicts changes
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 a park between 1980 and today. Looking at the park as a whole,
it is clear that
 it has been more developed for tourists, with more recreational space for outdoor eating, seating, and playing. The sole omission concerns the flowers. There was
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 on the west and south side and a pond surrounded by three benches in 1980. But now, The gate is no longer there, the path is less
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, and there are additional benches around the pond. There are two additional roads coming from the top and right of the diagram, which
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space with trees, chairs, desks, and barbeque possibilities (previously only containing trees). A playground has taken the place of a flowerbed in the bottom right corner of the map. A second flower bed on the bottom left of the pond has been replaced with
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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