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Look at the two maps of a beach hotel at diff changes in the following areas:

#two #maps #beach #hotel #diff #changes #areas
The maps illustrate changes to the coastal resort before and after, as well
the
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as the
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 appearance of new buildings.
Overall
 the biggest change
were
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was
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added
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adding
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 more hotel rooms and water sports construction.
Firstly
, The housing infrastructure was doubled and
second
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the second
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 floor was built. They
also
 placed a new water
sport
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sports
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 building on the southeast side of the territory. There are
There are
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apply
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surfboards
boats
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boat
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 paddles and all the equipment for water sports. Another big change is that they tore down the beach fence, thereby opening up access to the beach and the sea where vacationers can spend time at the resort.
Secondly
,
Restaurant
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the Restaurant
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 and seating area have
replaced
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been replaced
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to
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with
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 the place where the swimming pool used to be.
Moreover
, the number of seating
area
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areas
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 has been increased.
Swimming
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 pool had been relocated to western
honor
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 near the hotel rooms,
also
 the pool has been resized and reshaped. We can see how the land has been landscaped by planting trees.
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