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You're working overseas in an international company. You are leaving the country in emergency. Write a letter to your friends explaining the situation. In the letter, you should: • apologise for leaving like this • explain what happened • tell them what you're going to miss about working with them

#re #company #country #emergency #friends #situation #apologise
Hi, Smith I am writing to
apologizing
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about
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for
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 leaving our country. As you know overseas is
great
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a great
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 way to me for achieve to my aims.
That is
 why I should leave our country emergency as
new
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 company called me during the next 3 days. About 3
month
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 ago I am writing to the manager of the company called "International Cargo" about working there. I think they
are value
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 my experience
that is
 why they are called to me. Now I am working here
more
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for more
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 than 4 days and I want to inform you that I missed out
our
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on our
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 company because everyone
support
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 me when I have trouble. I understand that it might be difficult for you to accept my apology, but I
have
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 not any choice. Yours faithfully,
Mr.
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Mr
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 George
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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